09-10-2011, 02:58 PM
Thanks for your kind words and feedback Bilbo
Because I can't format the piece the original layout isn't quite as it appears here. This is how it's supposed to look: http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/forum/p...read/1196/
Would it help if I separated the lollipop line from the AIDs couplet, like this:
"getting checked for AIDs each year
like it's a fucking birthday
(i wonder if the doctors give out lollipops)"
Thanks again for reading.
Because I can't format the piece the original layout isn't quite as it appears here. This is how it's supposed to look: http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/forum/p...read/1196/
Would it help if I separated the lollipop line from the AIDs couplet, like this:
"getting checked for AIDs each year
like it's a fucking birthday
(i wonder if the doctors give out lollipops)"
Thanks again for reading.
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe