09-08-2011, 11:49 AM
Yeah, again as long as you're making deliberate choices with white space. It may turn out it isn't effective in your particular poem, but you don't know till you try. It's when you do it because you feel like hitting hard returns for awhile sort of Edgar Cayce hearing a tapping message from beyond that you get into trouble. If someone asked you: why the white space? you should have an answer that's better than um it felt right.
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson
