09-07-2011, 09:16 AM
Thanks for your feedback and kind words, Todd
The nude woman wasn't supposed to be ironic. She was intended to be tempting to the narrator. I did think about putting nude man or fellow, but no word seemed to create as good a flow in my head as woman.
I'll remove the washing machine line once I've finished this.
Would "much softer" work better than "more comfy"?
Thanks again, Todd.
The nude woman wasn't supposed to be ironic. She was intended to be tempting to the narrator. I did think about putting nude man or fellow, but no word seemed to create as good a flow in my head as woman.
I'll remove the washing machine line once I've finished this.
Would "much softer" work better than "more comfy"?
Thanks again, Todd.
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe