Epiphany

[addy]

Hi LB. You can do a lot to tighten this poem up. Remember that you are speaking in poetry, not prose... some of the lines sound unnecessarily telly. That said, I could also spot your use of imagery here BTW, you don't have to use the commas at the end of every line... the line breaks already break up the phrasing for you

It’s been some time since we have departed,
A combination of pride and envy, I wouldn't use "combination"... how about "the dance of pride and envy"?
Caused the conflicts we are facing, a bit telly... you don't have to be literal. "forged this chasm", or a line to that effect, but better than I could write
What was to be a learning lesson,
Translated into a lost love for one another, this could even be one line: "learning lesson to love lost", or something nicer
And when we are in the presents maybe you mean "when we're both present"?, it’s difficult for our eyes to meet, again, it would be better to express this with an image, not just describe that your eyes can't meet

Around you I feel a burning pain in my stomach,
A hollow mind as I try to find what is the issue, maybe this needs to be rephrased
Soul shaking when you past ("pass"?) me,
My pride has shattered and vanished,
Ego high as a building but in the end,
Lower then it can be at this point, needs to be rephrased

The light glowing in your pupils,
When, don't need comma you look towards my direction[s],
Spits back fire towards my way, you used "toward" in two consecutive lines.
Sometimes, I wish the flowers that are dead, could be re born reborn
Similar to our situation needs to be rephrased

By the hours that pass, I hope for something
Though, I always get nothing, last minute this line lost me a little...
And I just had an epiphany present tense? "I have an epiphany"
There might not ever be a new beginning, "might not ever be" is a little convoluted... try "there may never be"
instead, we will remain distanced.instead of telling, use an image... it'll make the ending stronger

A few more rewrites will improve this greatly. Remember to always think of fresh imagery, and not rely on telling.

Thanks for sharing your poem!