Poem. "Couple"

[addy]

Very inventive poem. Like the others said, it could still be tightened up. When you're trying to build the tension into a crescendo, your lines, too, should start sounding more urgent and direct. (ex., instead of "the waves destroyed the picture", how about "waves batter the picture"?)

Also pay attention to your tenses. Your poem starts out in present tense, but by the end you've switched to past tense.But anyway, with those minor tweaks, you've really got something here.

Thanks for sharing!