The Nihilist's First Psalm

[Leanne]

Jack, I would agree with everything Todd says and in addition, you might consider different phrasing in the second couplet as I don't know that the repetition of "worship" is necessary -- it seems wasted in a small poem like this. Perhaps something along the lines of:

you went inside to worship your God.
i took communion with coke and fries

yeah, just playing... anyway... I love the contrasts and the discarded sandwiches image is very poignant.