08-08-2011, 02:00 PM
This is excellent, one of your best pieces in that it demonstrates very well your sensitivity as a writer. There's a homeyness to the scene you set but a great sense of flatness that isn't frightening at all: just curious and dreamy and tired. The old western town motif you chose is spot-on... a mapless refuge somewhere in the middle of hazy spans of light.
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?