Speculation

[Todd]

Jack,

This is great. So much to like here. A few comments for you:

We've always belonged here.
Anyone who's ever lived
will one day see these frame houses,
the old saloon, the creaking sign,--maybe change the old to this old
the yellow plains which cradle them,--love this line
more flat than undisturbed water.--and this line is fantastic as flat gives a two-dimensional sense as if the speaker can't believe his own construct
You could watch someone walk a month,
twelve miles beyond the town,
until the dot becomes too small,
and they appear on the sidewalk again.--kind of a hotel California vibe

I will eat the last white sweet
and see you by the tavern door.
But I am terrified of sleep.
How will I know the path from rest
to eternal consciousness?
What if I grow lost?
Is nirvana's driveway long,
does it wind through trees; --great line
are there stars between the earth
and the afterlife?

Perhaps I'm naive to assume the final stop
is such a place, a quaint old town
with sand and sun. Perhaps when we awake from death
a high window depicts four walls, on the other side
just light, endlessness you cannot reach.--last two lines are the best in the poem

I really enjoyed this.

Best,

Todd[/b]