Mr. Thomas
#7
in his dotage dared to tell
of love for his own sex,

it works for me

i pointed out why i changed my mind about the incest thing a bit further down.
for me it would work better as a consistent end rhyme scheme or without end rhyme

in a way if you kill someone for you are condoning murder Wink
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Mr. Thomas - by heslopian - 08-04-2011, 01:01 AM
RE: Mr. Thomas - by Todd - 08-04-2011, 12:08 PM
RE: Mr. Thomas - by heslopian - 08-04-2011, 12:11 PM
RE: Mr. Thomas - by addy - 08-04-2011, 03:26 PM
RE: Mr. Thomas - by billy - 08-05-2011, 10:39 AM
RE: Mr. Thomas - by heslopian - 08-05-2011, 10:49 AM
RE: Mr. Thomas - by billy - 08-05-2011, 10:53 AM
RE: Mr. Thomas - by heslopian - 08-05-2011, 10:56 AM
RE: Mr. Thomas - by billy - 08-05-2011, 10:58 AM
RE: Mr. Thomas - by heslopian - 08-05-2011, 11:11 AM
RE: Mr. Thomas - by billy - 08-05-2011, 11:19 AM
RE: Mr. Thomas - by billy - 08-05-2011, 11:29 AM



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