07-30-2011, 10:34 AM
Quite like this.
I think it's about a young red-gum tree speaking to his father.
I didn't think Australia had sparrows ( I could be wrong).
**** did some research on the sparrows. They were killed and re-introduced. hence the *****Long time past and yesterday
the sparrows brushed the sky away, so i like this also.
Like
the old ones dug in deep and summer arch collapsed.
Think Hide sheltered to describe the Aborigines (sp) is sufficient and
may not need (deaf).
I like
sorry specked and ghost gum dreaming. I think it refers to a young tree.
one foot ochre yearning,
one far cloud seeking.
This sounds poetic but didn't care for it descriptively.
The last stanza must be the refraction of the rainbow serpent, off the billabong. I kind of got lost here, not really up on Australian folk lore.
Nice read.
David
I think it's about a young red-gum tree speaking to his father.
I didn't think Australia had sparrows ( I could be wrong).
**** did some research on the sparrows. They were killed and re-introduced. hence the *****Long time past and yesterday
the sparrows brushed the sky away, so i like this also.
Like
the old ones dug in deep and summer arch collapsed.
Think Hide sheltered to describe the Aborigines (sp) is sufficient and
may not need (deaf).
I like
sorry specked and ghost gum dreaming. I think it refers to a young tree.
one foot ochre yearning,
one far cloud seeking.
This sounds poetic but didn't care for it descriptively.
The last stanza must be the refraction of the rainbow serpent, off the billabong. I kind of got lost here, not really up on Australian folk lore.
Nice read.
David