The Storm (2nd Revision)

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(Second Revision)

Black rain washed over weathered pavement
into the drain, shadowy tendrils reaching out..

Clouds bled a crimson sigh,
wounded by rays reaching down like search beacons..

Fleeting warmth drifted away with the winds,
leaving me cold, wet and alone,
in the fold of destiny.

(Alternate)

Black rain washed over weathered pavement
into the drain, shadows.. tendrils.. reaching out..

Clouds bled a crimson sigh,
wounded by rays reaching down like search beacons..

Fleeting warmth drifted away with the winds,
leaving me cold, wet and alone,
in the fold of destiny.


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(First revision)

Black rain washed over weathered pavement
into the drain like shadowy tendrils reaching out..

Clouds bled with a crimson sigh,
wounded by rays reaching down like search beacons..

Fleeting warmth drifted away with the winds,
leaving me cold, wet and alone,
in the fold of destiny.

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(Original)
The black rain washed over the weathered pavement
into the drain like shadows of tentacles reaching out..
the sky opened up where the clouds bled with a crimson sigh
as the suns rays reached down like search beacons,
for a fleeting moment I could feel its warmth
as it drifted away with the winds leaving me cold wet and alone,
thus I remain in the fold of my destiny.
~ck~