07-19-2011, 10:02 AM
(07-19-2011, 08:50 AM)Heslopian Wrote: For all the beauties of the earthyou're becoming adept at these buggers.
I still seek out death's mystery.
I cannot find a thing of worth
for all the beauties of the earth,
not icebergs, sunlight, streets of Perth;
I am resigned to misery.
For all the beauties of the earth
I still seek out death's mystery.
if i had one nit it would be beauties. the word reminds me of women ( i know it could just be em :blush) would beauty work as well and be less ambiguous, not that ambiguity is bad, i just think in this instance it's less called for.
as to the poem..i think it's top notch. streets of perth was a stretch
but it works so i'm not complaining about it. jmothanks for the read.
