Despair

Despair

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07-19-2011, 09:04 AM

Try "I still seek out death's mystery" instead... and you've got a perfect form, with plenty to think about packed into some very lyrical lines.

Not bad at all, Jack Smile

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Despair - by heslopian - 07-19-2011, 08:50 AM

RE: Despair - by Leanne - 07-19-2011, 09:04 AM

RE: Despair - by heslopian - 07-19-2011, 09:17 AM

RE: Despair - by Leanne - 07-19-2011, 09:20 AM

RE: Despair - by heslopian - 07-19-2011, 09:21 AM

RE: Despair - by billy - 07-19-2011, 10:02 AM

RE: Despair - by heslopian - 07-19-2011, 10:18 AM

RE: Despair - by ICSoria - 07-20-2011, 08:06 AM

RE: Despair - by heslopian - 07-20-2011, 08:08 AM

RE: Despair - by ICSoria - 07-20-2011, 02:00 PM

RE: Despair - by Leanne - 07-20-2011, 05:26 PM

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