love poem

[Leanne]

I like your repetition of "i have kissed goodnight my dreams", and the gentle irony of the closing lines, but overall I feel this poem is very tell-y, with quite a few overdone motifs. "sunlight on (a) stone" is a pretty image (slightly skewed by using it as a metaphorical description for the penis), but the tabula-rasa idea that follows has been done to death. "god is dead" similarly offers nothing new.

I'm sorry, Jack, but for me it reads as a bit of a diary entry. This could just be my aversion to love poetry speaking, of course.