07-14-2011, 09:38 AM
Not much to comment on here imo... I loved it. A great, thoughtful study. It's always interesting to see things through your narrative filter.
(07-13-2011, 10:46 AM)Heslopian Wrote: my old head of year has died of cancer.
i remember sitting in her office in high school
and she had grey hair which shone like nettles
as the sun through the window behind her lit it.
everything could be explained by hormones
in her opinion, or so it seemed at the time.
sadness, fights, abuse, bullying,
all down to your biology, growing like bacteria. I like this intro into her character, so succint and telling about who she is and the figure she played to the narrator
i accused her once of emotional blackmail
and she vanquished me with the stern, dulcet tones
which reminded me I was a kid. she was nice though.
in the way all small women with well groomed children
and healthy salaries are nice. she wore a beige jacket
and wandered the halls with a clipboard. she was nice. Like the unease this repetition brought
and now she's gone and i've agreed to attend
a wake-like I didn't really like the description "wake-like", its vagueness does convey an awkwardness that fits with the piece party on the beach, where empty gestures
will be made with purple ribbons, torches, songs,
as though we're pagans worshipping wicker.
i'll always remember the light in her hair,
how dark her office was, and how unnaturally normal she seemed. Great image of white, black, and grey.
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?
