(content) Conception: A Prose Poem

[billy]

i think it a great write and some very descriptive lines, love "yardie on the arse of a petty thief from Manchester" but for me this is out and out narrative, the poetic device in the piece is simile and though their good and original they aren't for me, enough to take the piece of of being solely narrative prose. i would have hoped for some assonance, alliteration, etc a nice write but for me needs a couple more poetic devices
thanks for the read.