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Sorrow for the Stars
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07-13-2011, 09:12 AM
(07-11-2011, 08:01 PM)Vika Wrote: So you think I should tell the reader why I feel this way, somewhere in the middle?Hmm, I don't think it's necessary, once you do the edit Todd suggests and the poem get's a little leaner. Then the second half would be a nice, effective and shorter build-up. 
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?
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Sorrow for the Stars - by Vika - 07-10-2011, 03:01 PM
RE: Sorrow for the Stars - by billy - 07-10-2011, 03:19 PM
RE: Sorrow for the Stars - by Vika - 07-10-2011, 03:26 PM
RE: Sorrow for the Stars - by billy - 07-10-2011, 03:34 PM
RE: Sorrow for the Stars - by Vika - 07-10-2011, 03:50 PM
RE: Sorrow for the Stars - by billy - 07-10-2011, 03:57 PM
RE: Sorrow for the Stars - by addy - 07-11-2011, 09:45 AM
RE: Sorrow for the Stars - by Vika - 07-11-2011, 08:01 PM
RE: Sorrow for the Stars - by addy - 07-13-2011, 09:12 AM
RE: Sorrow for the Stars - by Todd - 07-11-2011, 11:01 PM
RE: Sorrow for the Stars - by Vika - 02-05-2012, 06:22 AM
RE: Sorrow for the Stars - by Vika - 07-12-2011, 07:47 AM
RE: Sorrow for the Stars - by Erthona - 02-05-2012, 05:05 PM
RE: Sorrow for the Stars - by Philatone - 02-06-2012, 04:45 AM
RE: Sorrow for the Stars - by . . . . - 02-11-2012, 04:17 AM
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