07-10-2011, 03:26 PM
Thank you for reading 
I will fix the "beauty" repetition... it does sound a bit off. As for the imagery, that is a problem I have always seemed to have. My style is simple but I understand that I need to come out of my comfort zone. I normally try not to change my poetry too much after writing it, but I will try and reword certain parts of this one.
I appreciate your feedback
I will fix the "beauty" repetition... it does sound a bit off. As for the imagery, that is a problem I have always seemed to have. My style is simple but I understand that I need to come out of my comfort zone. I normally try not to change my poetry too much after writing it, but I will try and reword certain parts of this one.
I appreciate your feedback
What happens to the hole when the cheese is gone?
-Bertolt Brecht
-Bertolt Brecht