06-02-2011, 03:20 AM
I liked the "heart shaped box." I don't know if you meant it as a reference but it reminded me of the great Nirvana song nonetheless. This is quite a lovely stream-of-consciousness narrative. One suggestion I will make is that you try dividing it into verses, as then I feel it would be easier to digest. Also I don't get the idiosyncratic capitalisation in the title. All just my opinion of course. Other than those nits this is great. I love how the last line recalls the title, and the very personal landscape you convey here is strikingly vivid. You make private pain publicly accessible with enviable skill.
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe