06-02-2011, 01:26 AM
(06-01-2011, 11:34 AM)addy Wrote: I adore the richness of the internal world you put forward, there's something welcoming yet at the same time unfathomable about it. There's probably some repetition in this piece that can be cut out, but there are other thematic repetitions worth keeping (for example, the red blue and purples as images for bruises/pain but also vibrancy). A wonderfully evocative vibe. Thanks for the shareThank you addy! I went to a very deep place to find this one in myself, where as the verse usually finds me. I do see a few places where an edit is necessary, the repetition came from me reacting to what I wrote, like "Ha ha ha Studio 54 Studio 54 in Area 51", I actually wrote down my reaction after I read what I wrote, I'm not quite sure why, but I do feel that it's not instrumental to the piece. I'm stoked that you enjoyed the read, very cool.
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