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A Song of Empathy
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05-30-2011, 12:00 PM
What do you mean by "is 'this new burst of joy,'"? Also, do you think the first verse is weak, or is it just that the second and third stand out more? Thanks so much for the kind words and feedback Bilbo. I'll use your suggestion about the period before "lilacs."
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe
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A Song of Empathy - by heslopian - 05-30-2011, 10:55 AM
RE: A Song of Empathy - by billy - 05-30-2011, 11:27 AM
RE: A Song of Empathy - by heslopian - 05-30-2011, 12:00 PM
RE: A Song of Empathy - by billy - 05-30-2011, 12:21 PM
RE: A Song of Empathy - by addy - 05-30-2011, 12:31 PM
RE: A Song of Empathy - by ficosdarkness - 05-30-2011, 11:51 PM
RE: A Song of Empathy - by heslopian - 05-31-2011, 02:43 AM
RE: A Song of Empathy - by billy - 05-31-2011, 05:39 AM
RE: A Song of Empathy - by heslopian - 05-31-2011, 06:51 AM
RE: A Song of Empathy - by billy - 05-31-2011, 09:19 AM
RE: A Song of Empathy - by totalchuck - 06-01-2011, 03:58 AM
RE: A Song of Empathy - by heslopian - 06-01-2011, 10:56 AM
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