05-24-2011, 10:51 AM
Actually I didn't know this was a Shakespearean sonnet. One of the few learned people on DU was kind enough to teach me about how different strength syllables at the beginning and end of lines create different effects. From there I decided to put ten syllables on each line and affect some sort of iambic pentameter. Like you noticed with “blue sky” this wasn’t that successful but I think I gave it a pretty good go. I might have been a bit too ambitious by also having a classic rhyme scheme.
The poem was originally supposed to just be three quatrains but in order to round it off properly I needed another couplet.
I really understand what you mean about content coming second to form. How this turned out was a long way away from my original vision, which I couldn’t make work with the structure. Thanks for the kind words and feedback Bilbo.
The poem was originally supposed to just be three quatrains but in order to round it off properly I needed another couplet.
I really understand what you mean about content coming second to form. How this turned out was a long way away from my original vision, which I couldn’t make work with the structure. Thanks for the kind words and feedback Bilbo.
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