05-22-2011, 07:14 AM
This is rather wonderful. The structure of the piece lends to its serenity. The dancing, the nature imagery and the romance gives this a Latin feel. One of those upbeat poems which also makes you think. I love it Bilbo. I'd delete the one comma though as it isn't needed in a piece which has no other punctuation (IMHO).
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe