Poetry Forum › Poetry Forum › Intensive critique and workshopping
Long Weekend

Long Weekend
billy Offline
Are you alluding to me?
Posts: 5,057
Threads: 1,075
Joined: Dec 2009
#4
05-17-2011, 02:10 PM
not if you change 'like' to 'of' or some such.
Demon mawed gargoyles

Nauseating party tunes blare through
Demon mawed gargoyles on either side of the stage.

turning it to something other than a simile
Poetic Devices *** Why Read Poetry? *** Poetry Tips
Reply


Messages In This Thread
Long Weekend - by heslopian - 05-16-2011, 06:58 PM
RE: Long Weekend - by billy - 05-17-2011, 11:08 AM
RE: Long Weekend - by heslopian - 05-17-2011, 01:06 PM
RE: Long Weekend - by billy - 05-17-2011, 02:10 PM
RE: Long Weekend - by heslopian - 05-17-2011, 04:08 PM



Users browsing this thread: 1 Guest(s)
Do NOT follow this link or you will be banned from the site!