05-14-2011, 03:26 PM
(05-14-2011, 09:46 AM)jadielue Wrote: Juxtaposed lovers covered.You have a way with images it seems. Really interesting stuff
Lanky, no need for comma? and high, romping
in the sheets like pin-ups I like the picture-perfect image it conjures, though I don't normally associate pin-up with a dynamic word like romp
on walls.
His tactics were radioactive
as her form took shape. Excellent... made me think of human radiation shadows scorched by the a-bomb
Police tape stained the
coverlet, pooling at their
feet. Good ending, teasing and intriguing

PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?
