Lure
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(05-14-2011, 09:46 AM)jadielue Wrote:  Juxtaposed lovers covered.


Lanky, no need for comma? and high, romping
in the sheets like pin-ups I like the picture-perfect image it conjures, though I don't normally associate pin-up with a dynamic word like romp
on walls.

His tactics were radioactive
as her form took shape. Excellent... made me think of human radiation shadows scorched by the a-bomb

Police tape stained the
coverlet, pooling at their
feet. Good ending, teasing and intriguing
You have a way with images it seems. Really interesting stuff Smile
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?
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Messages In This Thread
Lure - by jadielue - 05-14-2011, 09:46 AM
RE: Lure - by billy - 05-14-2011, 02:00 PM
RE: Lure - by heslopian - 05-14-2011, 02:02 PM
RE: Lure - by addy - 05-14-2011, 03:26 PM
RE: Lure - by jadielue - 05-14-2011, 03:58 PM



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