~ Brass Princess~

[ficosdarkness]

because knowing nothing of wrong,
I am forever destined, to know nothing but.

the syntax in the 1st line says you know nothing of wrong
the syntax in the 2nd line says you will know nothing but wrong

the but sets up a dichotomy of sorts (for me at least) and i have to do a double and third take to try and understand if what i got was correct. the but leaves me hanging though i know what it is you're saying. for me the poem has no real dichotomy or needs it.
after the last line i'm asking myself if the 1st person is now defending her position in life, the one where she still loves the brother even though he is the golden child. if so then it detracts from the whole of what i took away from the piece which is that even in knowing she was number 2 it did nothing to dampen the real love she had for the brother. jmo hehe.

because it feels like a defence then the brass and strength could also be called into question. as the but in some way feels like a weakness.

I see what you mean... any suggestions on a fix. I don't want to detract or call into question any part of the piece and I certainly would like for all feel the whole of my love for my brother. (If that is at all possible.) What do you think?

What about if I leave a question, a kind of "what I don't know won't hurt thing?"
Because knowing nothing of wrong, how could this be?