05-08-2011, 02:03 PM
(05-05-2011, 11:22 AM)Heslopian Wrote: Howling winds. Dark corridors. Snow beating like fists
on the windows and walls. A creature evolved
from vegetable life which feeds on blood,
and doesn't care whose. Why does this chilling story need
stupid macho army types, ignorant studs
who look like they belong in a cigarette ad from the first world war? I like how you did this stanza... a great suspenseful set-up to the scene that draws you into the horror, only to be pulled out into the meta-bright lights of hollywood filmmaking. A fun deceit
I want to watch the scientists. I crave to see them huddled round
a lab table, discussing this monster from the stars;
reaction shots of scared faces, terse arguments, fighting,
a battle between their natural instincts
and a yearning for knowledge, the secrets this strange Thing withholds. Ah, yes. Indeed, sci-fi at it's heart is a rational-leaning and very philosophical form of fiction
So why Mr. Hawks do you punish me with an airhead captain,
his jaw line a central personality trait, LOLand the male bonding
he inflicts; "gee wiz Jimmy, the Thing slaughtered
those bodies like hogs! Why don't we trade a cigarette
and talk about the girls in Acapulco?"
Not to mention his woman, and all the clichéd pouting
she does. "An alien's been found, history hinges
on the study of it, ethics and morals are becoming confused,
but first I think I'll tie you up and tease your libido, captain." Oh god, THIS, all of this. I am reminded of a scene in "Dr. Strangelove", which was kind of a parody itself, where a bunch of scientist and officials in the war room were discussing that the humans who should be saved in order to repopulate the earth had to be the smartest males, and the most beautiful women to serve as glorified breeders.. what a low class discussion
If I ever write a horror story the first people to die,
the ones hanging from the ceiling, necks cut
and fluids drained, will be these fucking idiots,
the captain and his girl Friday, preferably side by side,
with cigarettes still caught in their lips. I love the bite of this ending
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?



