05-08-2011, 10:55 AM
Billy,
This deserves much more and I'm on a deadline for an anthology. Once I get past next week I'll try to come back. I think there are some things you can work on but holy fu%$k, this is brilliant.
I'm jealous how good some of this is...
I know that much;
I know of a girl in a room
Locked away like a dangerous thought.
God I loved that ending.
Best,
Todd
This deserves much more and I'm on a deadline for an anthology. Once I get past next week I'll try to come back. I think there are some things you can work on but holy fu%$k, this is brilliant.
I'm jealous how good some of this is...
I know that much;
I know of a girl in a room
Locked away like a dangerous thought.
God I loved that ending.
Best,
Todd
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson