04-27-2011, 10:17 PM
Oh, wow, thank you for such constructive feedback! I'm glad you enjoyed it. It's the first poem I've presented for any sort of critique. I think the poem could do with a structural edit, for sure.
In regards to the punctuation, I must admit that it is somewhat of an afterthought, so I can see your point
The format as well was something I didn't really antagonise over either, I typed it up as I wrote it and out it came on Word so...I'll take these very perceptive observations into account.
Thank you guys, I appreciate it.
Victor.
In regards to the punctuation, I must admit that it is somewhat of an afterthought, so I can see your point
The format as well was something I didn't really antagonise over either, I typed it up as I wrote it and out it came on Word so...I'll take these very perceptive observations into account.
Thank you guys, I appreciate it.
Victor.