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If, If (Re-write)
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03-31-2011, 01:31 PM
Nice. I like how even the repetition of similar metaphors is, itself, a metaphor for the obsession of rejection. I was just about to agree with billy that the final "if... if...?" isn't necessary to the message. I was thinking it might do well as simply the title, but then I saw the question mark at the end, which adds an entirely different connotation and enforces the questioning tone of the rest of the poem. So, my vote is leave it in. Good contribution!
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If, If (Re-write) - by ficosdarkness - 03-12-2011, 06:47 PM
RE: If, If (Re-write) - by kath3 - 03-12-2011, 08:56 PM
RE: If, If (Re-write) - by ficosdarkness - 03-28-2011, 11:49 AM
RE: If, If (Re-write) - by billy - 03-13-2011, 06:47 AM
RE: If, If (Re-write) - by heslopian - 03-13-2011, 07:54 AM
RE: If, If (Re-write) - by kath3 - 03-13-2011, 10:28 AM
RE: If, If (Re-write) - by billy - 03-28-2011, 05:36 PM
RE: If, If (Re-write) - by Verbavore - 03-31-2011, 01:31 PM
RE: If, If (Re-write) - by ficosdarkness - 04-05-2011, 04:20 PM
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