03-30-2011, 05:05 PM
i enjoyed the read, which feels nonsensically sensible
i'd have use swollen instead of deep on the first line but thats only me.
other than that i found it to be gritty and original.
i liked some of the metaphors. i think it's a good image of how the persona in the poem feels.
particularly the last 6 lines.
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i'd have use swollen instead of deep on the first line but thats only me.
other than that i found it to be gritty and original.
i liked some of the metaphors. i think it's a good image of how the persona in the poem feels.
particularly the last 6 lines.
.