03-23-2011, 08:07 PM
Thanks for the kind words and the feedback Billy. The tercet structure was actually inspired by Plath somewhat. I agree with you about the last line. Would "all we could do is smile like dolls" work any better? The "look" is the correct tense for what I was trying to convey. The memory is old but the narrator still dreams about it.
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe