03-13-2011, 10:28 AM
Hi ficosdarkness,
I loved this so much that I shared it with my husband who also really enjoyed it.
While neither one of us knows anythings about poetry, he did make a suggestion that the plexiglass seems
out of place as everything else seemed natural.
He thought this might fit.
If I were the sun,
would you walk in the shadows,
to keep my warmth from touching your skin?
If I were the wind,
would you huddle behind a rock
to keep me from flowing across your body?
If I were a tiny blade of grass,
would you mow me down,
to keep me beneath you?
Again, thank you for the poem
I loved this so much that I shared it with my husband who also really enjoyed it.
While neither one of us knows anythings about poetry, he did make a suggestion that the plexiglass seems
out of place as everything else seemed natural.
He thought this might fit.
If I were the sun,
would you walk in the shadows,
to keep my warmth from touching your skin?
If I were the wind,
would you huddle behind a rock
to keep me from flowing across your body?
If I were a tiny blade of grass,
would you mow me down,
to keep me beneath you?
Again, thank you for the poem
You give to the world when you're giving your best to somebody else.