If, If (Re-write)
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I liked it very much, went straight to my heart. (I've saved it Smile)
For me it felt sad and full of hurt ... unrecognition for all that you have or want to offer another.

These were my most favorite lines:
If I were your joy,
would you live in misery,
to show me that you're in control?
very profound, and discerning

If I were life,
would you sentence yourself to death,
before you realized that I make a difference?


You give to the world when you're giving your best to somebody else.
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If, If (Re-write) - by ficosdarkness - 03-12-2011, 06:47 PM
RE: If, If (Re-write) - by kath3 - 03-12-2011, 08:56 PM
RE: If, If (Re-write) - by ficosdarkness - 03-28-2011, 11:49 AM
RE: If, If (Re-write) - by billy - 03-13-2011, 06:47 AM
RE: If, If (Re-write) - by heslopian - 03-13-2011, 07:54 AM
RE: If, If (Re-write) - by kath3 - 03-13-2011, 10:28 AM
RE: If, If (Re-write) - by billy - 03-28-2011, 05:36 PM
RE: If, If (Re-write) - by Verbavore - 03-31-2011, 01:31 PM
RE: If, If (Re-write) - by ficosdarkness - 04-05-2011, 04:20 PM



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