A Serious Question.

[Todd]

Hi Billy,

A lot of these comments will of course be just a reaction and opinion, so take them as such. Here goes:

Where do daffodils go when dead.--I keep wanting to read this as: ...when they die?
Do they sleep or ever dance
with the non-beating heart of William the wordsmith,--I think I would prefer you to use the same phrasing you use with Herrick ("with the non-beating heard of Wordsworth")
and flash upon his inward eye in their thousand,--might sound better as "in the thousands"
enshrining him with a jocund company of golden heads.--this feels like it should end with a question mark?

Do they haste away, and with Herrick--maybe kill the comma and the and I know that changes it up slightly but again more of a feels smoother thing to me
pray at even-song to morn their own demise;--great line. If you make the shift above than maybe change "to" to and...otherwise leave it as it stands
as on the pearls of morning dew they fade--maybe do the homage as: "as these pearls of morning dew that fade". Good line break here by the way.
away while other poets weep at noon,--Other is a very nice touch herer
and feel the hours dry like summers rains that pass too soon--maybe simplify this to: as the hours... Again, another really good line

I like this Billy. It's a good piece. I apologize that these comments may come off as mostly stylistic line tweaks. Use what you like, ignore the rest. It's solely my opinion as to what sounds good to my ear.

Best,

Todd