the 3rd stanza made me stop for a while, i struggled a little for comprehension, the last 2 lines of it work fine, it's lines 1 and 2 of it that caught me on the hop. (i have no suggestions on how to work it)
othe than the above the piece sort of rocks. it has depth, some great lines.
obviously lots of biblical refs. if i had to make a nit it would be ;
and I am lashed like Abraham's son, i'm not sure if theres a similarity between abes son and what the writer feels he's going through.
both sacrafices i know, but abes was doen of love and duty to god.
other than that an unusal yet good read.
i have indulged
in the raping of angels. lines to move people.
thanks for the read as always heslpoian
jmo.