12-29-2010, 04:24 AM
Thanks for the feedback, Billy
I always have trouble ending these kinds of free verse poems, where I make it up as I go along. Hence the often truncated, contrived finales. I'll delete the last verse once I've finished this.
Thanks for the heads up on the spelling mistake, and I will remove the "rhythm" and "poet or shit" lines. I think they're a bit too blunt. Is that why you singled them out?
Thanks again for the feedback and kind words
I always have trouble ending these kinds of free verse poems, where I make it up as I go along. Hence the often truncated, contrived finales. I'll delete the last verse once I've finished this.Thanks for the heads up on the spelling mistake, and I will remove the "rhythm" and "poet or shit" lines. I think they're a bit too blunt. Is that why you singled them out?
Thanks again for the feedback and kind words
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