A Morning Persuation

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Very interesting. At first I found the use of "babe" pretty distracting, but later in the poem when the reader finds out that the POV character is in fact in bed with a stranger then "babe" makes sense as a way to cover up the fact she doesn't even know this person's name via sexual bravado.

For the line, "Anyways, the world has stopped revolving today..." I don't think 'anyways' is necessary but that's just me. With a few of the lines here, the extra words just make it sound more prose than poetry.

"We'll pretend that inside this sheets is Eden, Neverland or Wonderland "... I loved those lines.

Thanks for the read!