11-23-2010, 09:53 AM
I like your take on the personification of the elements. Very cute! Though I think in the first stanza, you need to change the word promiscuous: DEFINITELY not appropriate to describe someone "childlike" (promiscuous refers to sexual behavior)
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?