The Evil Within You I Adore.

[billy]

I wanted to redeem myself for those things we did,
But when I hear you I can't stop myself,
A smile arrives like an evil toad,
In my throat and cuts my voice box,
I never intended it to be this tempestous,
Leave me alone now so I don't want you more,
There's a good boy, as I fall to the floor,
Don't look back, I'm just fine,
Like there was never a vicious crime,
And in full swing I can rhyme and feel,
All that took place doesn't seem real,
But I'd be better off going to sleep,
There's no secret I've locked so deep,
And I know you hate these mushy tales,
But everything else in my brain simply fails,
You're the one that makes me feel,
The one that makes me ache,
Is that a good enough way
To say I loved you too?

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First Poem on this site.

a little work on the enjambment would help with the flow of the poem;

A smile arrives like an evil toad in my throat
and cuts my voice box,

no need for a comma at the end of every line.

all in all i enjoyed the poem, some good lines, i loved these two especially;
There's a good boy, as I fall to the floor,
Don't look back, I'm just fine,

with a really small edit i think you would have a really good poem. thanks for the read LT