Well played, sir.
Technically it's sound, with just a few rough spots on the enjambment which may be intentional for the informal feel. Once again, you demonstrate your weird sense of humor.
Technically it's sound, with just a few rough spots on the enjambment which may be intentional for the informal feel. Once again, you demonstrate your weird sense of humor.
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?