~Sadistic Indifference~

[ficosdarkness]

i can feel the flow of the piece fd. it's a bit like emimem meets dr dray but for me the whole block of writing feels too harsh.
it looks like your going for a kind of rap poetry and if so it works well. (though i think it would work better with a few breaks in it.) you have some good lines and some good rhymes though it's hard to distinguish if it's internal or end rhyme.
it does have lots of energy,

thanks for the read fd.

Thanks for that billy I really did try hard to put it in form before the post. I'm having a hard time with that, but I promise, I'll figure it out.(old dog new tricks??) I should have put it in the workshop first, but as good as you all are I was afraid that it would get shredded.(just too chicken $#@t!)