~Sadistic Indifference~

[billy]

i can feel the flow of the piece fd. it's a bit like emimem meets dr dray but for me the whole block of writing feels too harsh.
it looks like your going for a kind of rap poetry and if so it works well. (though i think it would work better with a few breaks in it.) you have some good lines and some good rhymes though it's hard to distinguish if it's internal or end rhyme.
it does have lots of energy,

thanks for the read fd.