If, if...,

[billy]

great to see you back and posting

there have been a lot of if poems. (rudyard kipling wrote a great one here) it's worth a read his is an educational come inspiring poem to sons in general while yours seeks an answer. (which is okay)

for an if poem to be fresh it has to ask things in a new way, or answer the question asked in a new way (originally) (rhetorically speaking)IE;
If I were blood, coursing through your veins,
would you cut them open,
to drain me from your inside's, so I couldn't reach your heart? (vein cutting is really common) a question can't be cliche or old. only the rhetorical answers can be.

be cheeky, be silly or sombre but most and best of all be original
If I were blood, coursing through your veins,
would they ripen and rot before exploding
round that house-brick of a heart

i liked the plexiglass if

at the moment it feels like i've read it before by others. (ive done a few if poems myself) it doesn't shout out at me.
but the poem has a good chance of being really good if you can put a few images in there. and show us how think this person would react.

thanks for read. fico.