Haiku

[heslopian]

content woman reading
as autumn rushes past
the bus window.

i think this one of the good ones my small nit is "content" it feels like an assumption. as opposed to the literal slice of nature/image and "as" is it needed?

would another solid word such as fat, skinny, spotty, do better.

I see your point about the subjectivity of that word content, but your alternatives sound too aggressive... I'll have a think about it. Yeah the "as" isn't needed; I'll delete that now. Thanks for the feedback, Billy

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Cozy and evocative. Personally would've picked a word that didn't literally say "autumn", but it works nicely enough

How about "brown trees"? Thanks for the feedback and kind words, Addy