10-22-2010, 11:00 AM
content woman reading
as autumn rushes past
the bus window.
i think this one of the good ones my small nit is "content" it feels like an assumption. as opposed to the literal slice of nature/image and "as" is it needed?
would another solid word such as fat, skinny, spotty, do better.
as autumn rushes past
the bus window.
i think this one of the good ones my small nit is "content" it feels like an assumption. as opposed to the literal slice of nature/image and "as" is it needed?
would another solid word such as fat, skinny, spotty, do better.