If I Give My Confession (content) (revision)

If I Give My Confession (content) (revision)

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10-20-2010, 05:28 PM

I'm not much of a one for critiquing poetry but Billy's point was the thing that struck me very strongly--the final two lines are so glaring that it's like you've been spotlighting a field and thinking about what you've seen, then the guy you're with suddenly turns the beam into your face. Contemplative thoughts of the poem are instantly wiped away by "what a dick."

Definitely remove that.

"The fool doth think he is wise, but the wise man knows himself to be a fool."

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If I Give My Confession (content) (revision) - by Todd - 10-20-2010, 10:12 AM

RE: I am a confessional poet and I write confessional poetry (content) - by billy - 10-20-2010, 11:01 AM

RE: I am a confessional poet and I write confessional poetry (content) - by Todd - 10-20-2010, 12:16 PM

RE: I am a confessional poet and I write confessional poetry (content) - by Touchstone - 10-20-2010, 05:28 PM

RE: I am a confessional poet and I write confessional poetry (content) - by Todd - 10-20-2010, 08:57 PM

RE: I am a confessional poet and I write confessional poetry (content) - by heslopian - 11-09-2010, 02:49 AM

RE: I am a confessional poet and I write confessional poetry (content) - by Todd - 11-11-2010, 05:30 AM

RE: I Write Cofessional Poetry (content) (revision) - by Todd - 08-01-2011, 12:45 AM

RE: I Write Cofessional Poetry (content) (revision) - by billy - 08-01-2011, 11:32 AM

RE: I Write Cofessional Poetry (content) (revision) - by Todd - 08-01-2011, 11:42 AM

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