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Better Than Beans On Toast.
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10-12-2010, 11:10 AM
(10-12-2010, 09:44 AM)billy Wrote: thanks for the feedback as always addyI felt the pure power behind this poem. I think that you should not use the word 'fuck' so many times. It's okay though, the poem makes up for that. Some lines to me were more crude than they had to be, but like I said I felt real power behind them. I like it over all and I think you did a good job. |
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Better Than Beans On Toast. - by billy - 08-17-2010, 07:19 PM
RE: (adult content)!!! - by addy - 08-18-2010, 08:31 AM
RE: (adult content)!!! - by billy - 10-12-2010, 09:44 AM
RE: (adult content)!!! - by lizzyrose12 - 10-12-2010, 11:10 AM
RE: (adult content)!!! - by billy - 10-12-2010, 11:43 AM
RE: (adult content)!!! - by Bianca Alabaster - 10-13-2010, 12:11 PM
RE: (adult content)!!! - by billy - 10-13-2010, 05:06 PM
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RE: (adult content)!!! - by Leanne - 08-08-2015, 05:23 AM
RE: (adult content)!!! - by Mark A Becker - 08-08-2015, 07:24 AM
RE: Better Than Beans On Toast. - by billy - 08-08-2015, 08:16 AM
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