night horse

[billy]

[quote='Heslopian' pid='40826' dateline='1286151953']
when waking, like an animal, upon
summer's motherly call, the day people,
who strive and connect, without asking why,
view again the glades, and tranquil lakes, I
lie in wait for winter's breath, cold and tinged
with a lecher's disdain, eager to show
me his landscapes, like an art student,
zealous but talented. and so, with grim
and mournful heart, when my time does befall,
I stumble through this dense forest, like a
painted hall; dark wing of a hospital,
each tree a door concealing pain, until
I find you here again, my companion, my
sole survivor, my one other night horse.

Yeah, people on DU have talked about black stallions, mythical creatures, and all these other great images which never really crossed my mind; I thought my narrative was simply about two manic depressives in love. Reminds me of something that Harold Bloon, an American critic, said about how a reader perceives poetry, that their interpretation "may differ from the author's and be equally valid - it may even be better."

i was thinking of unicorns more as metaphorical beasties. that someone
special which the poem talks of.

as for the sonnet part. maybe if you hadn't mentioned it i wouldn't have noticed the lack of end rhyme

if i only noticed one syl it might be because the other two worked so well.
though i think i'm prob just trying to cover my ass

i think bloom was right. for every reader a poem has; it has the same number of interpretations.