10-05-2010, 04:17 PM
I like it. Some of the points with the switched around phrasing reminded me of Yoda from Star Wars (LOL! I don't mean it in a bad way) which in a way carried its own kind of poeticness. It felt more like you were playing around with the language structure rather than trying to make it really sound old.
Let's face it, some of the word choices are cliche but they were nicely put together. Don't agree with your use of the term "conceptuality", but that's just personal taste I guess
. Thanks for posting this
Let's face it, some of the word choices are cliche but they were nicely put together. Don't agree with your use of the term "conceptuality", but that's just personal taste I guess
. Thanks for posting this
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?